I really enjoyed your take on today’s efficiency of our government. You made some very valid points while clearly stating your thesis. By touching on the advances that the country has made over the past centuries, you can easily convey the point that we are still not where we need to be.
The counterargument you made was also very helpful in indicating that the hype over the “groundbreaking” things that Trump has done is just that: overhyped. As you stated that many presidents in the past have made similar moves support the argument that we must not compare ourselves to other countries, but instead we should focus on uniting our country.
Well done in using an efficient structure for the editorial and restating your thesis in your closing paragraph. Overall, the commentary did a good job of conveying your argument and keeping the reader’s attention.
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